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TokoToTheEnd
Posts : 4391 Join date : 2009-06-09 Age : 32 Location : Freezing to death in CT
| Subject: Tenebrous (Teen) Thu Jun 03, 2010 2:50 pm | |
| Poetry is a deal of joy and pain and wonder, with a dash of the dictionary. ~Kahlil Gibran
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My son, my child
The first time I saw him lying in my shaking arms I forgot all my past troubles at once There was nothing bad in my life anymore For I had him now to love and that was all I wanted
My precious son My innocent child
No longer did I dwell on him having no father at all It didn't matter that I was all he had I knew from the moment I held him That my love would be all he needed to grow
As I watched him grow up and learn new things Tears would sometimes swell in my eyes I knew that later he would leave me alone He'll become the wonderful man I can already see
My beautiful son My bright child
As he grew older he would ask me so much All these questions that five year olds don't worry about I could see him becoming the brightest boy at school Surely he would shine the most in his class
It was hard sometimes though Knowing I couldn't give him all the answers he thirst for They were the only thing he wanted from me And horrid thoughts that he'll be just like his absent father scared me
But what really bugged my mind at night As I watched my little boy discovered the world Was that he never asked about his father Never wondered who he was the only one without one
My curious son My pure child
Soon he was in middle school and so much older How fast the time of his childhood flew by us He began dating and very soon his questions changed Still no mention of his missing second parent at all
My sparkling son My only child
I loved my son so much; he was my only family I didn't want to have another child or husband My family practically disowned me after he left No, my child was the single most important person in my life
So of course I was very upset and nervous When he finally entered high school College was only in reaching distant from him And with his never ending brilliance it might be closer
My growing son My sweet child
No longer did he ask those questions to me Instead he took charge and went off searching for them Like the man he both was and was becoming I could no longer stop the tears in my tired eyes
Yet strangely my darling son has certain problems Barely any friends at all and always a new girlfriend Whenever I brought up the subject, he wouldn't care "I'm doing fine, mother. Besides you're all I need."
But I talked some sense into his thick head And watched him finally commit to one girl Felt a mixture of joy and sorrow; curiosity too That he still wasn't asking the one question that must be on his mind
My distant son My lonely child
And when it came time to finally let him go I did not try to hold him back from it I knew that I was loosing my only kin and life But I couldn't keep him from his future
When I heard news of his marriage Finally I found a reason to smile again He would not end up like his father after all I rushed to celebrate and to go tell him
My perfect son My loving child
Never thought that I would hear those words Muttered at his wedding in which I had attended even though I was sick Whispers of him cheating on his wife-to-be with some blonde That news finally killed what was left of my heart
In shock I ran to him, determined to yell But I sadly knew couldn't do that to him now Nervous and doubtful, my son needed his caring mother Instead I satisfied the question that was never asked
My confused son My pitiful child
Lying on my deathbed not long after that for I had cancer He told me he was so sorry he messed up like father I just took his hand in mine, giving him a forgiving smile Telling him I taught him right as I closed my eyes forever
My grow-up son My naive child
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Magus1108
Posts : 5083 Join date : 2009-06-05 Age : 30 Location : Aboard the Death Star, preparing to destroy the Rebel Alliance. Fear me and obey!
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Thu Jun 03, 2010 3:17 pm | |
| This was pretty good, Toko. I liked it! | |
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ConfusedShipper123
Posts : 1012 Join date : 2009-06-09 Age : 29 Location : Chrom
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Thu Jun 03, 2010 3:46 pm | |
| That was really well-written, Toko. I liked it a lot as well. | |
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TokoToTheEnd
Posts : 4391 Join date : 2009-06-09 Age : 32 Location : Freezing to death in CT
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Thu Jun 03, 2010 3:53 pm | |
| A poet's autobiography is his poetry. Anything else is just a footnote. ~Yevgeny Yevtushenko
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Look in this mirror How did I go From being a kid To almost an adult From entering kindergarten To be leaving school soon How did I change so fast Where did the time go In one second 18 years of my life has passed I can remember everything From learning to talk To learning to move on My body has grown Changed from those memories Everything I once was Is no longer true I never noticed the change From child to adult Slowly life molded me Making me it's own Look at these pictures And tell me what happened How did I change so much In what seemed like a second
Last edited by TokoToTheEnd on Fri Jun 04, 2010 5:48 pm; edited 1 time in total | |
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Magus1108
Posts : 5083 Join date : 2009-06-05 Age : 30 Location : Aboard the Death Star, preparing to destroy the Rebel Alliance. Fear me and obey!
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Thu Jun 03, 2010 3:59 pm | |
| Wow, fast update. This one was also pretty good. Great job! I look forward to more. | |
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Alec Admin
Posts : 3007 Join date : 2009-06-06 Age : 31 Location : The far, far west.
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Thu Jun 03, 2010 5:20 pm | |
| These are excellent Toko. The first one is very sad but in a touching way. | |
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almostinsane99
Posts : 5264 Join date : 2009-06-10 Age : 32
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Thu Jun 03, 2010 7:38 pm | |
| Both poems were awesome to read. Thanks for posting them, Toko. | |
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TokoToTheEnd
Posts : 4391 Join date : 2009-06-09 Age : 32 Location : Freezing to death in CT
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Fri Jun 04, 2010 5:51 pm | |
| Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason. ~Novalis
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Dancing Our Curse
Candles float on still water As I dance the night into submission Closing our weak eyes now Won’t see what we’re missing
Scattered melodies play Across my soul, striking my heart Yet I keep moving my damaged body Letting the music tear me apart
From the distance of the shadows Cries and helpless pleads are heard But we can’t stop moving Once we begin we are cursed
So the music keeps playing The candles snuff out and fall Crashing down under the water Hurting us all
But it’s ok that we have to be hurt We take our punishment like good children No one can save us from our fate No white knight will come running in
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I just want to say I appreciate all the comments and I encourage you to keep making them. The reason I have not commented on them is because I do not want to distract you from the purpose of my post which is the poem and the quote at top, which I am trying to match as closely as I can to the feeling of the poem. I just wanted to let you know so you don't think I'm ignoring you. | |
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Magus1108
Posts : 5083 Join date : 2009-06-05 Age : 30 Location : Aboard the Death Star, preparing to destroy the Rebel Alliance. Fear me and obey!
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Fri Jun 04, 2010 5:55 pm | |
| Another great poem, Toko! I loved it. Pretty interesting. Keep up the great work! | |
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almostinsane99
Posts : 5264 Join date : 2009-06-10 Age : 32
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Fri Jun 04, 2010 6:24 pm | |
| Same as Magus, above. Your poems are a nice read. | |
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ConfusedShipper123
Posts : 1012 Join date : 2009-06-09 Age : 29 Location : Chrom
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Sat Jun 05, 2010 12:52 am | |
| I really loved your last two poems, Toko. You really put yourself into them and they are exceptional. | |
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TokoToTheEnd
Posts : 4391 Join date : 2009-06-09 Age : 32 Location : Freezing to death in CT
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Sat Jun 05, 2010 5:10 pm | |
| All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling. ~Oscar Wilde
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A small child Sits at a window Looks at the world outside Quiet and peaceful Is the scene she sees Trapped inside the concrete walls Counts the cars that race past Stares at the people passing by To whom she shall never belong to She's sick and frail A disease spreads through her body Only seven and she might die All she can manage Is staring out a window Out into a world she can't reach All she wants now Is to feel the sun On her cold, pale skin To see her friends smile To laugh again as she runs Barefoot through the grass The taste of sugar on her tongue Of sweet chocolate The doctors say She has a small chance She may not survive the operation Her mother cries Her father weeps Friends send their last goodbye But the girl ignores the pain She places her faith in God To take care of her To help her love ones smile if she can't Asks God to give her her dream Prays every night It's time to go now Asks God one last time To help her get through Before she goes under She turns to the wall A small girl Looks out the window Hoping for life | |
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Magus1108
Posts : 5083 Join date : 2009-06-05 Age : 30 Location : Aboard the Death Star, preparing to destroy the Rebel Alliance. Fear me and obey!
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Sat Jun 05, 2010 5:19 pm | |
| That was pretty good. Sad, but good. I liked it! Great job! | |
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ConfusedShipper123
Posts : 1012 Join date : 2009-06-09 Age : 29 Location : Chrom
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Sat Jun 05, 2010 5:21 pm | |
| That was really well-written, sad, yes, but I really liked it. Great job, Toko. | |
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almostinsane99
Posts : 5264 Join date : 2009-06-10 Age : 32
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Sat Jun 05, 2010 7:53 pm | |
| Sad but well-written. Thanks for writing this Toko. | |
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TokoToTheEnd
Posts : 4391 Join date : 2009-06-09 Age : 32 Location : Freezing to death in CT
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Tue Jun 08, 2010 3:50 pm | |
| Poetry is a mirror which makes beautiful that which is distorted. ~Percy Shelley
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That Boy
Is that the boy? The one who lies with me when I sleep? Is that the boy? The one who's heart I will keep? Is that the boy? The one who you saw kiss her? I am not that girl. The one who was like his sister.
Is that the boy? The one who is always with me? Is that the boy? The one who will truly see? Is that the boy? The one who's by my side? I am not that girl. The one who he'll comfort when she cries.
Is that the boy? The one who knew my secrets? Is that the boy? The one who won't let me quit? Is that the boy? The one who pushes me on? I am not that girl. The one who lasts long.
Is that the boy? The one who gives me kisses? Is that the boy? The one who I use for all my wishes? Is that the boy? The one who I'll hug with a passion? I am not that girl. The one who's in "fashion".
Is that the boy? The one who makes me giggle and blush? Is that the boy? The one who's touch makes my mind spin and blood rush? Is that the boy? The one who I'm too shy to talk to? I am not that girl. The one who hides from you.
Is that the boy? The one who will make me laugh? Is that the boy? The one who is my other half? Is that the boy? The one who always can make me smile? I am not that girl. The one who's happy with you, even for a little while.
Is that the boy? The one who so easily gets embarrassed? Is that the boy? The one who's nervous about her meeting his parents? Is that the boy? The one who never knows what to say? I am not that girl. The one who can make him weak, yet he stays.
That is the boy. The one who stole my heart. That is the boy. The one who I love, though it's not smart. That is the boy. The one who I want to be with forever. And I am that girl. The one who he told "Never." | |
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Magus1108
Posts : 5083 Join date : 2009-06-05 Age : 30 Location : Aboard the Death Star, preparing to destroy the Rebel Alliance. Fear me and obey!
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Tue Jun 08, 2010 3:59 pm | |
| Wow, another great poem, Toko! Sad once again, but I really liked it. Great job! Can't wait to see what else you come up with. | |
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almostinsane99
Posts : 5264 Join date : 2009-06-10 Age : 32
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Tue Jun 08, 2010 5:34 pm | |
| Awesome poem. | |
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ConfusedShipper123
Posts : 1012 Join date : 2009-06-09 Age : 29 Location : Chrom
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Wed Jun 09, 2010 4:29 pm | |
| Great, but sad, poem, Toko. You are so good at conveying so many different emotions. | |
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TokoToTheEnd
Posts : 4391 Join date : 2009-06-09 Age : 32 Location : Freezing to death in CT
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Wed Jun 09, 2010 4:55 pm | |
| The poetry of the earth is never dead. ~John Keats
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Twilight
Twilight A time in-between Before morning’s first light How I long to hold you My dear Twilight
Sweet light When the sky is neither Lit nor darken Where I long to belong If only to be with you
The blue hour Another name you have But to me I will always know The true name you have Though I won’t say it
Twilight Let us dance during this time So few can see us anyways Let us revel and be free Until morning comes and the light Tears you away from me
My darling Twilight | |
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Magus1108
Posts : 5083 Join date : 2009-06-05 Age : 30 Location : Aboard the Death Star, preparing to destroy the Rebel Alliance. Fear me and obey!
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Wed Jun 09, 2010 4:58 pm | |
| Another great poem, Toko! I loved it. Great job! | |
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ConfusedShipper123
Posts : 1012 Join date : 2009-06-09 Age : 29 Location : Chrom
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Wed Jun 09, 2010 5:02 pm | |
| I really love the imagery in this one, Toko. Another beautiful poem. | |
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almostinsane99
Posts : 5264 Join date : 2009-06-10 Age : 32
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Wed Jun 09, 2010 9:33 pm | |
| Awesome poem. | |
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TokoToTheEnd
Posts : 4391 Join date : 2009-06-09 Age : 32 Location : Freezing to death in CT
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Mon Jun 14, 2010 4:07 pm | |
| The poem is the point at which our strength gave out. ~Richard Rosen
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Missing Something
A heart, a heart What is a heart? The thing that makes you alive Makes you real Pounding away in your chest Proving your right to exist A heart, a heart Pumping in your chest Filling you with blood And emotions as well Or is it? Does a heart control emotions Or is it all in their heads But yet it makes them blush Or it pounds when they get nervous Oh heart, oh heart You make humans what they are A key part in their lives Without you they are nothing My heart, my heart Where are you? My chest is empty, my body is cold I can not feel Am I not alive? Without you heart can I exist? I appear human, but I am not Heart….heart… Why are you missing? Making me nothing I yearn for you so that I may Finally realize why I am here | |
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ConfusedShipper123
Posts : 1012 Join date : 2009-06-09 Age : 29 Location : Chrom
| Subject: Re: Tenebrous (Teen) Mon Jun 14, 2010 4:20 pm | |
| Beautiful, powerful poem. You are an incredible writer and person. I can really see how much you put into this piece, Toko. | |
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